<div dir="ltr"><div>Hello,<br><br>Below is my comments and proposed edits on the ICG draft charter <br><br><br><b>b. Solicit broader input<br></b>.......communities, everyone’s input is welcome across all <br><b><br>Response</b><br>
I propose this to be updated as thus:<br>......the ICG will provide a process to receive and review everyone's input; this process will allow communities who don't fall within the 3 categories submit their contribution/proposal. <br>
<br><br><b>(iii) Assembling and submitting a complete proposal </b><br><br>......verifying that the whole fulfills the intended scope,<br><br><b>Response</b><br>I suggest that the scope be clearly indicated. If the scope referred to here is the scoping document then i propose the following rewording:<br>
......verifying that the whole fulfills the intended scope as defined in the scoping document,<br><br><br>....communities in a manner similar to what was described in task (ii) above. <br><br><b>Response</b><br>Its important to clarify that there is always a need to public comment whenver an update is done on the draft proposal. Inview of this, i propose the following re-wording:<br>
<br>....communities in a manner similar to what was described in task (ii) above and the updated draft is re-presented as described in iii above. <br><br><br><b>(iv) Information sharing <br><br></b>The ICG should serve as.....<br>
<br><b>Response</b><br>I don't know which is more action based between "should" and "will" but in this context i think will may be an appropriate word here and this applies to everywhere should is used in (iv)<br>
<br><br>.......the ICG members are listed, etc.....<br><br><b>Response</b><br>Its important to indicate the moderation status of the content of the website. So i propose the following edits:<br><br>......the ICG members are listed, etc.....all information on the website will be publicly available without any form of restriction like user login details<br clear="all">
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<i><span style="color:rgb(0,102,0)">Seun Ojedeji,<br style="color:rgb(0,102,0)"></span><span style="color:rgb(0,102,0)">Federal University Oye-Ekiti<br style="color:rgb(0,102,0)"></span><span style="color:rgb(0,102,0)">web: </span><a href="http://www.fuoye.edu.ng" target="_blank">http://www.fuoye.edu.ng</a><br>
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<br><blockquote style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex">The key to understanding is humility - my view !<br></blockquote></blockquote></font><br></div>
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